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And I wait.

We leave you at your door, and as we pull away from the driveway I slowly sink into my seat, already lonely and lost.

And I wait to feel your presence once again.

Just as we reach our destination I feel I must escape… the pressure simply too much to bear inside this place called home. I set my desert on the countertop to melt away, grab my shoes and phone, then quickly head out the door as my lungs call for fresh air.

Rings vibrate through to night from my ear, yet I receive no answer. And I shed tears as the fresh evening air my lungs just called for, now fills my chest with gloom.

And I wait for a call that never arrives.

Morning comes, and warm electric air now flows from a small heater under the desk, warming my feet from the stale atmosphere of this space deemed an office. Yet it makes no difference, as I’m still cold and sore from the feelings I have inside, from the worries racing through my mind.

And I wait to hear from you. Anything to let me know you’re still there. Anything to let me know that you still care.

And I wait.
©2003-2009 ~toophysical
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:iconblackravenwing:
One thing: you spelt dessert wrong. It says desert as in the sandy thing that camels walk on.

Part from that, its quite good. Short and simple, it easily gets the message across although it doesn't at the same time. Interesting.
:icontoophysical:
Dammit! I thought I corrected that typo before I submitted. *Sigh* Dammit again.

Ack. Anyway, thanks for pointing it out to me...

...and thanks for the comment = )
:iconondabrinkosanity:
lol i didn't even notice it. shows how good i am at english. But i was to distracted from the story. You are a very good story teller. I like this one and feel very sad. The ending is so real. I mean everyone once or many times in there life ask that question about everything. It makes the whole piece more personal. again you have a great choice of words to get your meaning across

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