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Disrupted Thought by ~toophysical:icontoophysical:

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Disrupted Thought

Calculated concentration
and precise deliberation
have escaped me.
Intoxicating curiosity
and intense desire
have taken hostage of my mind.

Breathe once flowing freely
now clutches to my lungs.
Pulse once lightly treading
now fleetingly struggles
within the confines of my chest.
Desperately, each and every part of me
searches for release,
a calm to these sensations.
Yet in tandem,
I crave it and I feast upon it,
devouring and thirsting for more.
©2003-2009 ~toophysical
:icontoophysical:

Author's Comments

I can't get him out of my mind, he has a hold on me.

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:iconacidangel:
~acidangel Jul 25, 2003, 1:18:40 AM
If i could describe your way of writting on this poem i would say that you got a smart way. I like this, very delicate but also deep. :) (Smile)

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Music won't save you from anything but silence,
not from heartbreak, not from violence.
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~scarlettsumtimes Jul 26, 2003, 3:06:36 AM
This is good...i like the way u contrast the feelings here. I love the last 2 lines which sum up the dilemma.

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luv scarlettsumtimes
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~heartofadragon Jul 28, 2003, 9:54:20 AM
I love it! i'm gonna add it to my favs +fav :) (Smile) great job!!! ur description and emotions are exquisite
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`chilipalmer Jul 31, 2003, 7:00:55 AM
Awesome I know how this feels, you read my poem ;) (Wink) Beautiful :P (Lick)

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:icondementedteen:
~dementedteen Aug 4, 2003, 8:19:55 AM
Beautiful imagery....addictions of the mind are the best kind. The final lines are perfection.

"I crave it and I feast upon it,
devouring and thirsting for more."

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Art is what happens when the sane people sleep.
:iconnihonjinpinay:
~nihonjinpinay Aug 6, 2003, 6:52:48 AM
i love this. and these lines mostly, "Intoxicating curiosity/and intense desire/have taken hostage of my mind."


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~0ootoxiccandyoo0 Aug 7, 2003, 2:01:44 PM
this is beautiful and full of emotion
lovely
thnx for the comment


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Stephanie;;
:iconchronoflmzon:
~chronoflmzon Aug 27, 2003, 11:06:04 AM
oooooh this is really cool.... def. worth reading a couple times over keep up the good work

-joe aka Chrono
:iconm1ch:
~m1ch Aug 29, 2003, 7:56:43 AM
it's wonderful... :) great writing!!
it strikes many chords inside.
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